Why the kangaroo hops! Retold By
mikalya mcClennan J
Long long ago in the dream time kangaroos walked on
there four legs like other animals. But Kangaroo was shy. Every day he slept
under the mulga tree and at night he came out to eat the tall blades of grass.
One day when kangaroo was sleeping under a mulga tree.
A bush fire started up. He leapt to four legs and started running furiously but
as he got closer the fire had surrounded him. His front paws got burnt black.
He no longer could run or hop, so he started
hopping. As he got to the end of the
fire he made a mighty leap or the burning hot flames.
Once he was over the he tried to walk on all four legs
again. But he could not his legs were too weak so he strong hind legs again and
hopped away.
So if you look at a kangaroo’s front paws very careful
you will see were they got burnt long long ago.
nice story but some of it dosen't make sense, so make sure you proof read it before you put it on the blog.Danielle.
ReplyDeleteNice narative Mikayla good puncuation and i like how you put tall"blade" of grass it makes your story sound really detailed.
ReplyDeleteFrom Jessie J
i loved your story i liked that you gave detail about how his paws were burned and about how he hopped. Keep the stories up.
ReplyDeleteLove, you San Diego friend Miranda
From Shane, San Diego. I think that was a good story because it was very detailed and had good adjectives such as tall,burning, and strong.
ReplyDeleteWhat season is it in New Zealand?
it is eirly summer mikayla
DeleteIn paragraph 1 I loved how you started. It made me want to keep reading. Your a great writer.I love how you added the fire because it makes it interesting.
ReplyDeleteYour San Diego friend
Kana!
In paragraph 1 I liked how you made me want to Keep reading. I loved how you added the fire because it made it more interesting.
ReplyDeleteyour San Diego friend,
Kana!
thanks kana i hoped your class liked it to :)
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